I was going to ask how you were doing, but this does not sound like the haiku of a woman whose body is treating her kindly. It is excellent, but it is as harsh as the lazy winds which spear through you in winter.
So evocative. Would a torrential downpour clear the smoldering fire? Or would a soft misty rainfall be better? I am just not sure any of those would quiet the howl, eh?
I was going to ask how you were doing, but this does not sound like the haiku of a woman whose body is treating her kindly. It is excellent, but it is as harsh as the lazy winds which spear through you in winter.
ReplyDeleteQuite a scene you paint in this.
ReplyDeleteWonderful brush strokes of paint in this image! Especially love "tattered landscape"!
ReplyDeleteYou've painted a vivid scene with only a few words. Well done.
ReplyDeleteSo evocative. Would a torrential downpour clear the smoldering fire? Or would a soft misty rainfall be better? I am just not sure any of those would quiet the howl, eh?
ReplyDeletePowerful haiku ~ well done ~ thanks, namaste, ^_^
ReplyDeletewhat an ominous mood you set! excellente!
ReplyDeleteExcellent haiku!
ReplyDeletePowerful and haunting...
ReplyDeleteI want to reiterate what Elephant's Child had to say...the haiku speaks to me of both warmth and cold...and I thought of Dr. Zhivago of all things!
ReplyDeleteWhat a picture this paints, so many possibilities!
ReplyDeleteQuite a picture you've painted here. Very nicely done.
ReplyDeleteHmmm ... quite a punch!!
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terrific, can be taken in many ways, I like to "see" a campfire with wolves howling in the hills nearby.. well done *S*
ReplyDeleteLovely imagery! I can see it so vividly.
ReplyDeleteOh, my, there is something very haunting in this. It sent chills down my spine.
ReplyDeleteWow. I love this. You create an vivid picture, tugging at our imagination to fill in more and know more about it. Great job!
ReplyDeleteyou hit on a lot of sense in this haiku
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Such a clear image from this haiku, love it.
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