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25 Apr 2012

sorrow unfolds

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draw tight the blinds against the light
no illumination needed

to sit alone
in mournful desolation

I listen as the leaves unfurl
to flutter in the breeze

sounds echo murmurs of despair
residing in my heart

© by Karen


Written for Ella's Edge @imaginary garden with real toads
An exercise in writing from the inside out.

Sharing with The Poetry Pantry @ POETS UNITED
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21 comments:

  1. Well expressed...with depth of feeling VERY evident.

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  2. "draw tight the blinds against the light" ... I really like the sound in this, as well as the imagery and symbolism.

    Sometimes it feels good to lie down in mourning, let it drown you for a while before you fight back.

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  3. I agree with Mary. There's something about the first line, a lilting rhythm that sounds familiar, somehow comforting, to me, despite the pain expressed in the lines that follow. A very good write.
    K

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  4. Wow, so much is seen in your words!
    Private and so much sight at the same time! I'm in awe~ Well Done

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  5. You have captured the emotions well....."draw tight the blinds against the light...."

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  6. I hope this doesn't mean you had a sad day... but it is such a beautiful poem, Karen. Cheers.

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  7. I do think, however, that what one needs to do is OPEN the blinds.

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  8. An incredible write. So few words, yet what is said packs a wallop! Well done!

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  9. Excellent! I like your experimenting with an alternate form.

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  10. I agree with That Someone!

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  11. The outer world often seems to reflect the inner--and the metaphor of shutting out the light is very effective.

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  12. well done - a nice unfoldment of sorrow... "no illumination needed"
    but
    "I listen as the leaves unfurl
    to flutter in the breeze"

    yes, really nice

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  13. Shutting out the light...to not want anything but the darkness to reflect the pain within...a beautiful but sad poem

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  14. deep and touching words hon, but not a good place to linger for too long, let the light in *hugggggggs*

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  15. Ughhhh...how hard it is sometimes to fight back to that light. Great take on the challenge, dismal and deep and well written.

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  16. Your poem sure hits home. Im feeling that mournful desolation.

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  17. Simple and yet, profound. Beautifully penned.

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